卡迪夫大學 ( Cardiff University ) 是一所享譽世界的高等名校，國際知名學府 , 簡稱卡大。在卡大，一些專業的中國和印度留學生人數甚至超過瞭英國本土人，其在留學生中的口碑非常好。卡大的商學院和新聞與傳播學院世界聞名，下面將與大傢分享一篇成功申請卡大商學院管理專業的文書范文，一起來找找亮點吧 !
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My greatest achievement to date was when I was appointed head of the 6th form Management committee. I have turned it from a minor committee to a thriving active part of my school. Whilst maintaining the balance between academic and extra-curricular pursuits I have used my initiative in starting and managing the ‘ Cafe ’ at my school to raise funds for any 6th form investments. Having planned this project from the outset, I have learnt how to analyse problems and come up with solutions whilst meeting deadlines and executing a basic business strategy. These formal positions have taught me vital life skills such as leadership, planning, working with others in a team, and delegation. It has given me my first taste in managing a business, and I am eager to learn more.
After a lot of research into many careers and thorough background reading such as "The Irrational Economist", I realized a career in business is something I would like to pursue. Having observed the rapid changes in global economics, and the way firms react has inspired me to take this knowledge further. My enthusiasm for business has always been in its management: the fine art of ensuring that a set of high quality cogs create a functioning timepiece.
When choosing my A level subjects I took into consideration which transferable skills would be of use whilst pursuing a business based degree. I took the highly analytical subject Economics due to its relevance to the current climate in the business world as well as to train me in writing focused persuasive essays. Not only has my study of critical thinking supported this, but it has taught me how to critique the arguments of others. Further Mathematics has taught me how to analyse problems and to interpret information. My study of Biology provides me with the logical mindset required to approach any subject which will no doubt be helpful in studying for my chosen degree. Finally, in studying AS level Religious Studies during my free time, I learned valuable lessons, in philosophy and ethics as well as working independently whilst exercising well developed time management.
As well as my schoolwork I take part in many extra-curricular activities; I am currently head of my local youth group, where I have learnt how to take control and organise different activities. I have always been interested in the wellbeing of others and have taken part in voluntary work. I enjoy my volunteer work at Childline, as it gives me a sense of purpose and achievement, whilst enabling me to communicate in an empathic and systematic manner. Not only has it taught me to be a team player but also some key skills of how to be a leader, such as how to listen to people ’ s problems and remain uninvolved, and follow certain guidelines on how to deal with a situation. My communication skills are further supported by my work in speech and drama, when I have both delivered and judged speeches and debates, teaching me how to assess objectively and give constructive and positive feedback.
I understand that a business based degree is a highly demanding course and needs dedication and hard work. I have taken up activities which involve these attributes; karate is a sport which I enjoy and its basic principles of motivation and hard work are qualities I value. I have also taken up ballet and modern dance, Duke of Edinburgh, drama and piano; reinforcing discipline, dedication and performance skills.
A business based degree is exceptionally diverse and can lead to many opportunities; I will thrive on studying its many depths and breadths. At present I have only just ventured into the business world and I am eager to learn more. Potentially I would like to set up my own business in the future and a business based degree will aid me. I see myself as a very capable and enthusiastic person who will grasp this challenging degree with both hands to further my academic potential and become an asset to your university.
點評：
1. 商學院對專業能力要求很高，尤其是管理方面。申請者開篇即談到瞭自己最得意的成就——成為某一管理委員會的負責人。在第一段即說明與專業相關的個人成就，很有推陳出新的意思，當然對申請者如何引導並安排其後的內容也有一定的考驗 ;
2. 申請者接著敘述瞭自己如何走上管理之路，並用瞭一個恰當的比喻來闡釋自己對管理的認識與愛好。在文書字裡行間中，表露自身對所申請專業的深層見解與愛好，這是為招生官所喜聞樂見的 ;
3. 在談知識架構時，申請者也展示瞭自己的獨立思考——有針對地選擇相關課程。另外在數學統計、生物、宗教、哲學與倫理學，申請者涉獵廣泛 ;
4. 倒數二、三段，一般都會安排課外活動和興趣愛好，對於管理專業來說，團隊協作力、領導力、交流能力則尤為重要，可以有意識舉些能展示這些能力的例子。
文書內容安排有其固定格式，比如首段快速高效引入主題，接著談專業學識與學術成就，再就是課外活動與興趣愛好，最後來個總結升華。這樣的文章可能沒啥風險，但也極難出彩。這篇文章貴在開篇即談與管理相關的成就，不再千篇一律，還能展現申請者的自信。一篇文章可以有一兩個突出亮點，如何向招生官展示這一亮點，就要靠自己多看多悟啦。
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