腐國一直是中國留學生最喜愛的留學目的國之一，這裡不僅有聞名遐邇的劍橋、牛津，還有古老的 " 紅磚六校 "，享譽全球。而在英格蘭約克郡的約克大學，同樣是英國頂尖大學，其教學質量與劍橋大學並列教學聯盟的首位。下面就與大傢分享一篇成功申請該校生物學專業的優質文書。
專業：生物學
Offer：約克大學 利物浦大學 曼徹斯特大學 紐卡斯爾大學 諾丁漢特倫特大學
文書原文：
I think snorkelling in the great Barrier Reef is the closest thing to magic I ’ ll ever have the fortune to experience. The fragile coral beneath the majestic manta rays cannot help but provoke massive curiosity into the complex ecosystems and inspire endless wonder for the natural world. This awe drove me towards a desire to study biology at a more in depth level, where questions I ’ d never even considered could be answered and others left a current mystery, until future research.
This awe prompted me to read ‘ Coral: A Pessimist in Paradise ’ by Steve Jones, in an endeavour to discover more about the relevance of such ecosystems from a human perspective. I was particularly fascinated by the theoretical immunity to age of some cnidarians due to their use of stem cells for regeneration and repair. I was intrigued by the possibility of using these animals to learn more about the use of stem cells in human medicine, but also made aware of the issues that have been found during current research.
During my AS level biology course topics regarding speciation and evolution have become a great fascination to me, inspiring me to consider the impact, of a constantly changing population of species, on society and the environment, and as a result I decided to read ‘ What On Earth Evolved? 100 Species That Changed The World ’ by Christopher Lloyd. This book challenged my perceptions of influential species and forced me to look further into the impact of less obvious species, such as the earthworm. The impact of such a creature was one I initially dismissed as insignificant, but in fact, it ’ s resilience in the face of mass species extinctions is utterly remarkable, yet pales in comparison to its integral role in sustaining human populations, as its soil fertilising abilities have provided human societies with a source of food for thousands of years, making it a hugely important species from the perspective of human survival.
In 2010 I spent a placement week with a reception class at Seaton Infant School. During this work experience I had the opportunity to work one to one with less able children to help aid their mathematical skills and improve their problem solving abilities. Coming up with new approaches to try and convey information and ideas in a fashion that would keep their interest, whilst encouraging them to think around problems logically proved to be a challenging yet rewarding experience, as it provided a valuable insight into different learning methods and techniques.
I have also participated in my school ’ s debating society, which I feel has greatly developed my public speaking abilities and increased my confidence, whilst allowing me to discuss issues important to me in a constructive and structured manner.
I feel completing the Duke of Edinburgh Bronze Award had drastically improved my cooperation and communication skills, allowing me to work well within a group and play an integral role in task completion. It also demonstrated the importance of not only self motivation but also group motivation when faced with difficulties within a strenuous task. Learning how to approach issues in an effective and efficient manner whilst maintaining consideration for conflicting ideas has vastly increased both my interpersonal skills and my problem solving abilities, better equipping me for life.
To be able to study a subject that can explain life itself from both a microscopic level and an encompassing perspective is one that I find thoroughly exciting. I would love the opportunity to discover and explore the plethora of biology available to me at university, and have no doubts as to the level of dedication I could bring to the course.
點評：
1. 開篇即成功抓住招生官眼球——在大堡礁潛泳，對珊瑚的著迷引發學習生物的興趣。這個開頭簡直不要太完美 !
2. 緊接著，申請者談到瞭對其產生影響的書籍，著重談這本書使其對生物世界乃至人類醫學產生瞭新的認識。這是個人陳述常用的手法——談一本書籍。當你對這本書有足夠深刻的見解和認識，建議使用，否則可能會給自己挖坑哦。
3. 除瞭專業學習，申請者談到瞭自己的志願工作、參加學校辯論社以及在一項活動中的獲獎經歷。申請者談自己在工作中的具體作用，以及從中獲得的收獲，尤其是在團隊合作能力、溝通交流能力上的提高。
4. 需要註意的是，在談到 "the Duke of Edinburgh Bronze Award" 時，申請者可以簡略介紹下，以免招生官不瞭解。申請者在描述工作經驗和課外活動時，文字間的真實情感流露並不多。招生官希望從具體的活動中去瞭解申請者的個人成長變化，而非簡單的有關能力的形容詞語的直接堆砌。
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